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Sam got up at six o\'clock yesterday. After having breakfast, he went to park by bicycle and enjoy himself in the park. He had luch in the MCdonald\'s at the noon with his parents.Then he went home and had a rest. He was playing basketball with his classmate from 4 o\'clock until 6 o\'clock. After hading dinner, sam went for a walk with his father . His father bught a classical CD for him, What a interesting day.
