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Sam got up at six o\'clock yesterday. After having breakfast, he went to park by bicycle and enjoy himself in the park. He had lunch with his parents in the MCdonald\'s at noon.Then he went home and had a rest. He was playing basketball with his classmates from 4 o\'clock until 6 o\'clock. After having dinner, sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him, What an interesting day.