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How to Protect Our Eyes We spend more time on equipment which caused our eyes are hurt. Protecting our eyes is very important. Firstly, we have to keep our gesture correcting and 50mm distance between eyes and screen. We should see the view far from here after working one hour. Don\'t staring at the screen for a long time. Secondly, do some excises for our eyes. The last, we often have a look at the green plant.