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My favorite sports is football!By accident,i fell in love with soccer.On the way of street,i picked a soccer,then i played football with my friends.After that i loved it very much. I always train and play football with my classmates,we are interested in soccer! My favorite football player is David Beckham,i lke him very much!After all.My biggest dream is going to be a a professional football player.