作者词汇表达丰富多彩,但是要留意单词拼写;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
When it comes to the lessen and endangered spieces triggered by human activities,different people hold different opinion since various educational background and personal experience.For someone,the damage is inexorable and irreversible that any remedy is futile effort which own their pessimistic attitude.While,for others,they admit that the human activities do harmful that are probably endangered on pants and animal species,but by pooling the resourses and power provided by goverments and citizens,we can improve the situation.Personally,I am inclined to the latter view. In order to fuel the business growth rapidly,more people and enterprise are reluctant to underscore the pivotal of protecting plants and animal species.With the global warming constantly,the melting glaciers are becoming faster and faster.Concievably,the animals which are relied on the certain environment can not survive too longer.Unfortunately,it is almost impossible to alter this trendency,the fact have been demonstrated by itself.Similarly,appealing to the economic construction,more rarely plants are cut down which have been used as precious medicinal materials,and without control to abuse. With the exception of the situation above,there also exist amounts of plants and animals deserve attention.Goverment should raise the public's awareness,thereby creating a more reliable environment.What we need is for all citizens to become more invovled in making societies better instead of just relying on leaders to sovle our problems for us. Finally,even some plants and animal species are extinction,we can not take drastic measures to curb the bad condition.And it is every individuals duty to call for and blaze a trailor between the economy and naturer.