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Sam got up at six o'clock yestoday.Then go to park to ride a bike.Noon and parents at McDonald's (McDonald's) lunch.Afternoon, Sam and his classmates in the school to play basketball.From four in the afternoon has been hit (till) six p.m.After dinner, Sam and his father walk (go for a walk), his father bought him a classical music CD. How interesting that day Sam flies ah!