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Hello,I am Lucy King.I am a 13 years old.I am from UK.I want a chinese pen ple.Because I love China very much.My hobbies are sports,movies and music, such as Sun,Season in the sun and so on.I hope you like them ,too.And i want you to teach me Chinese.I can also teach you English.Than is all. Do you want to ba my pen pel?