2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

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Nowdays,more and more people use the mobile phone,except for the people in the far away valiage,about 80% people of the the population is using the Phone.As the electronic technology development,the mobile phone is producted in large amount, not only it make people connect each other conveniencely,but itself have many helpfull functions.