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Sam waked up at six clock,and then bike to park,he has a good day in the park.He have lunch with his partens in Mcdonald's.He and his classmates palied basketball in the afternoon,from 4 p.m till 6p.m.Sam and his father go for awalk together after dinner,father gave him a cd about calssic music.How wonderful time sam has