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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.then he rode bacical bicycle to go pank,he was playning do funny on pank.he ate lunch whit his mother at McDonald's. Sam playing basketball from four o'clock until six o'clock whit his classmate on shool.after dinner,Sam goes for a walk whit his father,his father bought a classical music CD.Sam was so much interesting this day!