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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.Then he by bicycle to go park,He was playing do funny on pank.He has lunch whit his mother at McDonald's. Sam playing basketball from four o'clock until six o'clock whit his classmate on school.After dinner,Sam go for a walk whit his father, and His father bought a classical music CD.Sam was spending interesting this day!