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Hello,my name is Lucy King,i come form the UK,i have a lot of hobbies,such as sports\music\movries.i'm fond yof china,i think china is a very interesting country,so i want to know more about China.I want to find a chinese letter friend.That is great if you have the same hobby with me,i am glad to learn chinese with you together.