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It was Sunday yesterday and I was very busy.I got up at 6:10.I did sports and then had breakfast. After breakfast,I cleaned my room.Then I played the guitar for two hours.I cooked lunch for my family because my parents were at work.In the afternoon,I played soccer with my friends in the park.I was really tired and came back home at 6:20 pm.Then I ate dinner,after dinner I took a shower and watched TV for about an hour.I did my homework at 8:30 at night. I went to bed at 10:30.