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Sam went to bed at six o'clock.Then he went to park by bike.Sam thinks it was a good way to keep healthy.And he has a good time in the park. In the afternoon,he ate lunch with his parents in the McDonald's. After that,he went to school to played basketball with his classmates.He was not going home back until six o'clock. After dinner.He took a walk with his father.It was good for them healthy. His father bought a CD to him so that he was so happy.Because he was so like music. How fun the day is!
