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From kindergarten to now,i have lots of teachers they play different role in my life ,whatever i like or dislike them,All of them are meaningful for me.but speaking of favourite teacher firstly reminds me of him.he is my mathematic teacher in high school. .At that time,he just graduated from university,so he seemed very approachable and charming for us.everyone likes him except principal.i was very poor at math,but he patiently coached me in math for free after class.because he was not strict,so i often felt ease during coaching. i enjoyed spending every moment with him.honestly,at that time,i did not understand what love is ,but i had special affection to him in my deep heart