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Sam get up at 6:00am yesterday, then he ride bicyle went to the park, he has a good time at the park. he eaten McDonald's with his parents for lunch . Sam and his friends play basekteball at schoool , they are still play balls at 6:00pm. When they have finished dinner, sam and his father go for a work , his father bought a classic musci CD by him. how was a funning day!