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Sam was get up 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he go to the park by bike , which have a good time .And he have lunch in McDnald's with parents.IN the afternoon ,Sam play the basketball with classmates from 4 o'clock to 6 o'clock. After dinner ,Sam go for a walk with father,then father bought a classical music CD for he.The day Sam lived have so funny.