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Sam woke up at six yesterday. Then he went to park by a bike and had fun. Have lunch with his parents in McDonald’s. Afternoon Sam played basketball with his friends from 4 pm. to 6pm. after supper,Sam with his father went for a walk, his father bought him a CD. what a funny day Sam had had.