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Sam got up at six yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park and had so much fun. He had lunch in McDonald's with his parents. Afternoon Sam played basketball from 4 to 6 with his classmates. After supper,Sam went for a walk with his father, his father bought him a classical CD. What a funny day Sam had.