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Sam got up at 6 clock yesterday and then went to park by bike.He was very happy in the park. In the noon, he had lunch with his parents at McDonald's and then played the basketball with his schoolmate from 4:00PM till 6:00PM . In the after dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father who purchased a CD give it to him. What is a intersting day for Sam!