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With the development of globalization, China is now getting increasingly involved in international affairs. It is an inevitable tendency to improve national people's behavior and manner. Recently, a disscussion regarding this topic was held in our class. We all believe it's very important and urgent to increase the awareness of good manners for the public. We ofter, for example, see someone at the park spit, ignoring others' feeling, or someone shouting.