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文章用词灵活多样，学术词汇使用也比较准确；从句使用稍显不足，注意个别句子错误；文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词，结构比较严谨。
When human-beings has been gone through the industrial revolution,the fierce competition has been come into being,the advanced modern device has been invented and penetrated into our daily life.Consequentely,the multi-function and intellective machine has been a substitution of human-beings in diversity fields,thereby creating the spiritual stress for us,particularly for the students.Before rendering the impacts on the individual students,I will analyze the possible causes of this stress. Because of the limitation of the job opportunity and the over supply of the graduated students,it is inevitable for students especially the college students,who must take consideration of their future,with uncertainty risk.Adding a heavy burdon is not the students option,but an inescapable fact of life,and we need to constantly adopt to keep pace with it.Besides,from the perspective of the social value.Appareantly,the industrial innovation has been fueled the appetite for the wealth and status.Undoubtedly,the students are vulnerable to the atmosphere of pursuing the wealth and power.Consequently,they neglect the significant of relieving stress and sacrificing themselves into the fighting for competitors. As a result,it is conceivable that the students have to suffer from the stress from both physically and mentally.For example,the students who choose the challenging but rich rewards specialty,like finance,requiring them use brain frequently which are in state of stress without the relaxation.Some of them died from the diseases refereed to the brain in the later days.Besides,the youth delinquency could become a normal phenomenon if we could not treat the stress marble or guide their value orientation in a modest way
