文章用词灵活多样,但单词拼写错误较多;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错;作者应增加从句的使用。
Recently,it has been sparked hot discussion on the benifits and drawbacks brought by the hosting of the international sporting like the Olympic Games.Many countries compete for the rights to host these international games in an effort to enhance its sound of voice in the international affairs.Overall,it is the international sporting that brige the harmony among the participants in the name of competition.While,not only the merits the international sporting have brought,but also the drawbacks have generated. Before rendering the disadvantage come into being,I will analyze the benifits first.Apparently,the international sporting is the material bond that ensure the consolidarity of the whole human-being spieces and the continuilty of the spiritual of transcent ourselves.We have witnessed the processing of breaking the records battle and battle in the tripple jump in the Olympic Games.Besides,from the perspective of the host country,these grand activities attract variety of people all over the world,that means,the sporting could fuel the growth of the local economy. However,it is inevitable to raise the concern between the choosen country and others losered the election,thereby creating the antagonistic attitude toward each other.Morover,it is a waste of nation's fiscal which should be harnessed in the practical domain such as the scentific development.On top of that, the inhabitats may create a distortion thoughts that they are superior than the foreigners. After weighing the merits and drawbacks,we can safely come to the conclusion that though we could not eliminate the negative feelings and must allocate the proportion of fiscal expenditure,the potential benefit should not neglect from the human-beings spieces to the host country‘s prosperity.
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