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Tom's rules is get up at 6:00,he go to school at 6:15,he don't eat outside and listen to music on school days, he don'twach TV on school nights,he be back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening. when you know this wrold and you stiil love it, your fate will be beautiful. i like this rules