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This reminds me of one of similar experience of mine.There was a time when I argued with my mother over some trifles,which my mother forced me to clean my room.I was unwilling to follow her word and said that it was none of her business.Hearing of this,she was angry and begin to yell at me.So I talked back.What made things worse is that I added that I hated her most in the world,which really hurt her.Without saying anything,my mother went out.Just at that time,I saw her tears rolling,which made me realised that it seem as if I made a mistake.I should have never talk to my mother,who is the one I value most in the world.