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文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用学术词汇就更好了；可适当增加从句的使用，注意文中的一些小错误；层次不清晰，几乎没有使用衔接词。
Pollution is one of the serious environmental problems in China, especially in Peking. Car emissions and industrial waste gas resulted in the pollution. Everyone lives in the city without blue sky, clean water and fresh air. Do you have a private car? And how many cars do you have? Maybe you're thinking that everyone in your family should have a car and they will have a wonderful life than some people who ride bikes or go out by public transportation. But is that real? The only thing you have is a burden but definitely not a comfortable life. Yes, you will never take the bus or subway , but would you like to think about the rush hour? We all know of the problem of pollution, but do we really know the pollution? Only can we do is start from ourselves and ask yourself "if not now, when? if not me, who?"
