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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.then he rode the bike to the park,he played very happy.he had lunch with his parents in the McDonald's at noon.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmates at school from 4 till 6 o'clock.After supper,Sam went for a walk with his father,his father bought a CD of classic music for Sam.What is a funny day for Sam.