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June 3, Friday Fine On my way home on the bus, I saw a boy and his grandfather got on. The boy was about ten years old. His grandfather took a bag and a violin, so I put my seat to the grandfather. But the grandfather let the boy sit and he stand beside him. Suddenly, the boy shouted out and asked his grandfather to give him water. He drunk the water, then he threw the empty bottle on the bus. I think the boy would be take care of his grandfather and keep the enviroment clean.
