小学三年级英语作文:My grandfather

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My grandfather is a farmer.He is over ninety now. but he is in good health. his hair is all white. He lives in the surbub of Beijing. My grandfather has many hobbies. He likes writing , he had been fiinished the noble over one hurdred thousands. and he likes tourism. He has been to many places travel ,such as Tibet,Xinjiang ,Yunnan. He is very kind to me.