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Tom made rules for himself,he require oneself get up at 6 o'clock everyday. And must leave home at 6:15 and go to shcool.he must eat food at home everyday,And can not eat food of outside .he don't listen to music during the shcool.and don't watch TV on school nights.He must back home after school at am12:00 and pm 9:20.