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Yesterday Sam got up at six o'clock. Then he went to the park by bike. He had a great fun. At noon, he had lunch at Mcdonald's with his parents. After lunch, he played basketball with his friends at school. He stayed with them from four o'clock to six o'clock. After supper, Sam went for a walk with his father, who bought a classical music CD for him. How nice the day was.
