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Sam weaked up at 6 o'clock yesterday.And then he rode the bike to the park by himself,and he played very fun.He had lunch with his parents in McDonald's.He played the bisketball with his classmates in the afternoon from 4 till to 6.His father bought a classical CD for him.It was so funny for Sam.