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Sam waked up at 6 o'clock yesterday.Then he rode to the park by himself,and played very fun.He had lunch with his parents in McDonald's,and played the basketball with his classmates in the afternoon from 4 till to 6.His father bought a classical CD for him.It was so funny for Sam.