句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中用词稍显贫乏,在词汇拼写也要再接再厉;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
An interesting day Sam got up at six yesterday moring. He went to the park by bike and enjoyed himself. At noon he had lunch with his parents at McDonald's. In the afternoon Sam played basketball with his classmates at school from four to six. After dinner, he went for a walk with his fater, and his father bought him a classical music CD. How interesting a day it is.