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A funny day Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike. He played happily at the park. He had lunch at the Mcdonald's with his parents at noon. Yesterday afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates from 16 o'clock to 18 o'clock. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His farther bought a classific mesic CD for him. Sam had a funny day.