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My Dream What do you intend to do when you grow up.Scientist,doctor or actor?But I want to be a guitar player. Because I play the guitar very well when I was very young, and I love guitar very much. I hope that one day I stood on the stage, playing the songs composed by myself. I hope that when my two-year-old, when you can fulfill my dream.This is difficult, but I will work harder. I believe that this dream will come one day. I believe I can do it!