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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he rode a bike to the park. He had a great time in the park. At noon, Sam and his parents had a lunch in McDonald's. In the afternoon, he played basketball with his friends at school from four o'clock till 6 o'clock. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical music CD for him. And the classical music is Sam's favourite! What an interesting day did Sam have!