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Sam got up at 6:00 yesterday.Then he went to the park.He was happy in the park.He went to the McDonald’s to have lunch with his parents.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball at school with his friends from 4:00pm till 6:00pm.After dinner, Sam and his father go for a walk, his father bought him a classical music CD. How interesting that day!