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An interesting day Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.Then he went to the park by bike,he had a good time in the park.At noon,he had lunch with his parents at McDonals's.In the afternoon,he played basketball with his friends in the school,from 4 o'clock till 6 o'clock.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his dad,and his father bought a CD of classical music. How interesting Sam's day was!