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An interesting day Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.Then he went to the park by bike,and he had a good time in the park.At noon,he had lunch with his parents at McDonals's.In the afternoon,he played basketball with his friends in the school,from 4 o'clock till 6 o'clock.His father and he went for a walk after dinner,then his father bought a CD of classical music for him,so he is very happy. How interesting Sam's day was!