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Sam has been got up in six o'clock yesterday.And then he goes to park by bicycle,he was so funny. He with his parents has been eating lunch in McDonald's. From four pm o'clock till six,Sam with his customer playing basketball in the school.Sam with his father go for a walk when they was eaten dinner,father buy a classic music CD for him.Today is very interesting about Sam.