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tom,s rules often get up at 6;00.tom go to school at 6;15,don,t eat outside .donmtlisten to music on school days.don,t watch tv on school nights.be back home by 12;00 in the evening and by 9;20 in the evening There is a song ‘Tomorrow Will be Better’, I like to hear it so much, every time when I listen to it, I can feel the hope, even though I don’t feel happy, I will be positive to life. We will meet all kinds of difficulties, if we can hold on and keep move on, all the hard time will pass, the bright future will come sooner or later.