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Yesrerday i have all kinds of things to do.there are two great things to do it.first i rode my bike to the surpermarket to buy things.i had great fun in here.at noon,i had lunch in mc with my parents.in the afternoon,i played basketball from 4 to 6 with my classmates.it was relaxing. i went for a walk with my father.my father bougut a classical cd for me.i was very happy because i enjoy music very much.what a wonderful dayi did