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Our Monitor I am a student in Yucai Junior High School. I'm in Class 2, Grade 7. Our monitor name is Liu Kai. He is 13 years old. Liu Kai is tall and strong. His hair is black and short. He has a round face with big eyes, a small nose and a wide mouth. Now he is wear a white coat, blue pants and a pair of brown shoe. Liu Kai is my good friend. We like he ve ry much.