2013-2014年高考英语卷写作表达题目范文汇总(54):夏令营活动

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Hi,I'm WangShan.I am a female student from Beijing Sunshine Senior School.I am 16 years old.I have lots of hobbies and I live my life to the fullest.Enjoying music after studying is one of my favorites which I can refresh myself by from pressures.Also,I am fond of photogragher and I learn much from it.I'm a optimistic girl who likes to help others and talk with them.I love the nature and peace is what I hope most.I want to meet with new friends and learn foreign cultures by taking part in the summer camping.