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初一英语作文模拟题:我的理想

发布时间:2013-05-16 14:56浏览次数:2032
要求:
以“我的理想”写一篇作文。
要求句子通顺,语法正确,卷面干净,书写规范。
要求不少于60个单词。
用户的作文(系统评分85.5分
评语:

文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。

用户练习作文:

My dream I earnestly hope to lead a healthy and prosperous life in the future. Judging from my aptitude inclination and personality streaks, my ideal life will be that of a scientist, researching, lecturing, and writing books.   As I am from a farming family, I particularly enjoy being close to earth. If I can afford to live a pastoral life in the countryside, I will feel most blessed. As far as social life is concerned, simplicity is what I intend to pursue, so I really don't need too many friends. All these will be mere talk if I am idle now. To attain my goal, I must make a point of training my body and mind.   This is a highly competitive society in which everyone is eager to come out on top. That is not only a competition of physical strength and mental power, but a marathon of patience, faith, and perseverance. Life is not all roses, but with what I am being equipped with by the top teachers in this elite school, I surely deserve a promising prospect

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