句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;文章中拼写错误较多,同时请作者增加词汇丰富度;连词使用偏少。
My favorite sport Play soccer is my fevorite activities. i fell in love with it by chance:once i went home,i put up a fooball and played it with my friends.Form this time ,i deeply fell in love with it. I always training with my friend. my fevorite star is ,my big dream is become a professional footnall player.