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tom get up at 6.00.i think it is appropitare time to get up.tom usually get to school at 6.15.tom never eat outside.it is unhealthy way to eat outside.on school days tom didn,t listen to the music and watch tv on school nights.it is harmful to the body.tom remember to back home by 12.00 in the morning and by the 9.20 in the evening