文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Andy is the handsomest man I have ever seen. He has blue eyes that likes deep sea, when he laughs and always reveals a line of white teeth. And he is muscular, gentleman and courteous. The most important is he is erudite. You will open your mind when you take his classes, most of topics are about kinds of history and economy. Sometimes you will very enjoy when he is talking and he will show some amusing movement to express the topics. Although he attacks most of students, some students complain to his manager, for his classes is very serious and even scared. He was very disappointed that he have decided to change another center. He is the most prominent teacher in my heart.