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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bycicle, he had a wonderful time in the park. He had lunch in McDonal's with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam went to school playing basketball from four o'clock to six o'clock. After dinner, Sam go to walk with his father, his father bought a classical music CD. What a funny day Sam have had!